retrodisco666

Joanna; I saw the way you walked over from the bar, You pale red lips caught my eye. Your grey eyes overshadowed by dark mascara, and your rose hair hung ...

Your first line is one of the best hooks i have ever read. Pure genius. It shows struggles which people can put themselves, regardless of what that persons struggle is. ...

Hey, for your first post it is good, but obviously not perfect. When i joined i found it better to write something you wouldn't usually as that helps better as ...

Love it. Love it. Love it. Simple as that. ~Retro Disco666

Hey, I love this poem. I was a bit unsure about it at first due to the title, but I am really glad i read it. Really good. ~Retro Disco666

Hey, Guess what! It's Poe in a poem. I love it. ~Retro Disco666

Do angels cry in heaven? If I'm being honest, I think they do. Their tears soften the ground, and sprinkle the grass with dew. They dampen the mud, making my ...

Hello :) They are one or two typo's in this that you will need to go over. I would suggest a proof read again. I really liked this piece and ...

Hey, I have two points about the piece. 1. I don't think that wee would have been said in the time period 2. Who is he talking to when he ...

No problem. It's a good piece. ~Retro Disco666

Hey, i shall be your reviewer He enters the room like a king, pulling towards a linen paradise. Their lovemaking is like the parting of the sea. Hot as the ...

This is very good. It is not my type of genre but i though it was good. We can skip the girls three and four because there is nothing that ...

I like it before, but i can see that this is an improvement. ~Retro Disco666

Okay i won't describe my perfect girl, but i can tell you how to go about it. I start with describing their hair and i do that a bit, then ...

Hey, As poems in this genre go, this is okay. I liked it, but i can't see how it relates to the title, and where it does, it doesn't enough. ...