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Re: Mannequin
Hey, The repetition in this piece scares me,and not in the way I like. It is a strange scared, so well done, I guess. I actually like what you're trying ...
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Re: My Own World
Hey, congratulations, you have written a piece where, for me, the rhyme doesn't feel forced and works. So that automatically makes this poem amazing. However you misspelled poem at the ...
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Re: Trying to find myself
Hey, I like the content in this piece. It's main problem, is punctuation. You have capitals where they're not needed amongst other things. The structure of sentences are just the ...
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Re: The Groom
Hey, This is a really good piece. It reminds me of Salome by carol Ann Duffy. I think this is a really good style of piece and think more people ...
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Re: Figure No. Cupido
Hey, This piece is so cynical . . . I LOVE IT! It is very dark, it shows love as evil. it's awesome. If people put things like Love isn't ...
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Re: I'm not alone and the wind would moan.
Hey, I shall be your reviewer. The repetition of stanzas' doesn't have the effect you want. It just makes it annoying to read more than anything. You put a rhyme ...
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Re: Trapped
Hey, I shall be your reviewer. Not to be negative to start with but where is the punctuation. A piece without punctuation is okay, but when it is this lengh ...
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Re: Where?
You promised the world at my feet, You promised you’ll always “be there”, & you said that you will always stay, Hold my hand as the weathers change. But when ...
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Re: Darkness.
Hey, I shall be your reviewer. The poem is, erm, difficult to read who be putting it nicely. You rhyming scheme is off completely. If you want it to rhyme ...
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Re: If You Really Knew Me...
Adam I felt sick. I hadn't been this nervous since i auditioned for scrooge in a Christmas carol. It was horrible. What was strange though, was the fact that everybody ...
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Re: Ellipsis
Thanks for the review. I would just like to say the first word of this piece is ellipsis. Which means things are missing and feels like something is missing in ...
Jul 7, 2010 -
Re: Et tu, Brute?
Most do:D
Jul 7, 2010 -
Re: Et tu, Brute?
HIHIHI!
Jul 7, 2010 -
Re: The Red Herrin'-Chapter 1
Hey everyone. This is my first attempt at a novel, so please be brutal. Thanks *************************************************************************************************** Tuesdays'. It always
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Re: Vegas baby
Cloaked in the ribbon that is darkness, we all sell our soul for the right price, we hide where the light can see us, we are in the desert in ...
Jul 7, 2010