retrodisco666

This was truly incredible. It reminded me of a Dr Jekyll and Mr Hyde type scenario :) I have a question, where is this set? When I started reading it ...

Hi! I really liked this :) I liked the fact, the i is not capitalised, and no capital letters, it reminds me of poets who like this, decided the asthetic ...

Hi! I like everything your written here :) though I'd work on your form. If you look at a poem called the raven by e.a.Poe and looked at his form, ...

Hi! The first thing I'd suggest is the title. I think I'd change it to something Like a one word; cutter, maybe? I like the sardonic tone of the final ...

Hi I like the want for a dream concept, :) The repetition of any dream will do, I think this hinders the poem rather than aids it, maybe just at ...

Hi. I like how it has very little form, almost like an E.E.Cummings poem (just with a little more form) One thing I would not change is capital letters. Make ...

Hi! I really liked this, it reminded me of days by phillip larkin (part is in my signature, check it out) I would seperate it into two stanzas personally, to ...

HELLO! I love food related poems so it's an immediate winner :D I think what really makes this poem is the depth of your descriptions, though a few more adjectives ...

Hi! I'm going to get straight into things :D Your first stanza is amazing. The rhyme did not feel forced, it flowed really way, and was an amazing hook to ...

Jack and jill went up the hill to fetch a pail of water. Jack held jill down, by her crown, until she was fully under. Up jack got, and home ...

Jack and Jill went up the hill to fetch a pail of water. Jack held Jill down, by her crown, until she was fully under. Up jack got, and home ...

HELLO! I must say that i now intend to read this book, but i have a question. Is the novel self contained and how it ends that could be enough, ...

I wonder what fish think about, I mean really. - 47

HI! If you could take a look at that it would be much appreciated :D ~Retro Disco666

Hi! I have one suggestion! I think everyone would read the red first, I know i did. And it summed everything up. I didn't feel that it justifyed the rest ...