retrodisco666

Let me chase my ghosts. Don't try to hold me back. Let my memories haunt me and try to hold me back. Let the darkness guide me and be my ...

Hey, I truly loved it. I even liked repetition which I usually hate. You gave us themes, some subtle, some not. You mixed languages together, it flowed really nice. It ...

Hey, I think I know the competition you're on about. Mine is also getting published. If I get invited to the reading of them, I know I will not win ...

Hello :), I like this. It has deep, almost hidden meaning which you have to really look for, but when you find it. It is really effective. My only slight ...

Hi, Sometimes a poem needs raw emotion for you to latch on to and harness, however here I am not to sure. I think that because it is quite distance, ...

Hey, A dark poem. I liked it. I understood it all. It was effective. Well done. ~Retro Disco

Hi all. I wrote this after watching My sisters keeper , and I was kinda thinking about if I died. I think this was I would want reading at my ...

Hey, The main character in the piece has XP which means he is allergic to sunlight. Hope this helps. ~Retro Disco666

Locked ! I don't like it. "come inside" My mother said. She placed her palm upon my head. I grudgingly move inside our house. Where it is the dead of ...

Thank you for all the comments. They are really appreciated.

Hey, I really like the use of enjambment in this piece, it is really effective and works well. To build upon that I would try to put some caesura in, ...

Hey, For a lovey dovey piece this is really good. I had a tune playing in my head whilst reading this so the lyrics aspect really works. All my nit ...

Hey, This is a very strange piece, which means I loved it. The taxi’s windshield is pelted by sleet. but dinner is still boiled lobster. Marble pillars stand, silently erect, ...

I loved it in a nut shell. There is nothing more to say. It was my perfect idea for a poem, and I think you have done justice with it. ...

Hey, From the title of this poem I could tell that it was going to be mainly around imagery. I was pleasantly surprised to find what felt like a storyline. ...