retrodisco666

Hey, This is in the wrong catergory, it should be in short story :) It was good and very moving, well done. It go through with a fine comb as ...

Hey, I like it, it wasn't what I was expecting at all. I no longer can comprehend what direction my life is going in. I no longer have control. There ...

HEY! Coral, You know what I say ever time I review you, about the scales, I am glad to say I don't need to write it! You've done it, I ...

HEY! Making it up as you go along is a good basis for just make a poem basis, it needs to built on. It is very under-punctuated. and i'm taking ...

Hey! I liked it, but, as you wanted an opinion here is mine. The use of addressing the reader as the person in the piece does not work here I ...

Hi, This is meant to be a comparison essay so I'm going on what I have been taught about them. It is very biased which it is not meant to ...

hey will you take a look at my short story please :) ~Retro Disco666

"And where were you today?" Bert entered the room demanding everyones attention. He had his blue ensemble on with his bizzare ginger hair cut and lugging an oversized lollipop over ...

Tiger! I think the problem is the rhyme. It is far to force and bleeds the poem dry. it makes everything you're writing extremely cliché and makes the piece redundant. ...

Hey, i think this is a very clever idea. To start of with I wasn't sure where you were going with it, but I think you pulled it off. However, ...

A knife wedged in a wedding cake is a realist view of the world. Love is a silly little fantasy, dreamed up by little girls. I don't believe in love. ...

"Rochelle." I woke wearily, saying the first name that came into my head, "what happened." "Who?" Genuine confusion seeped within her voice. A silence screamed throughout the rook, seeping into ...

"You're what!" I turned my head from left to right, the entire room had fallen dead and prying eyes were set on us. "I - I" I gulped heavily, I ...

The sky, it beats. Pulsates with runs of red. The blood of thousands in which it has taken. You can smell the fear, the pain, the blood. You can sit ...

Thanks guys! The interaction will be for the most part, between NPC, but later on, if it pans out correctly there will be interaction between characters. ~Retro Disco666