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Hi! :) I would love it if you could review the first chapter (split into two parts) of my novel. It's called "Anything But Normal". Here's the link: Be brutally ...

Good start to your novel! I like the whole idea of this! :) I just have a few little critiques to improve this a whole lot. She collapsed to where ...

Very nice! I love how you just threw us into action and yet I felt like I didn't miss a beat. This scene felt very realistic; I was very surprised ...

Very good! I like the way that you don't necessarily have to tell the readers what's going on; you're just showing us. :) You're also very good at adding suspense ...

This is really good! I think you should try writing more lyrics! :) I'd like to read more of your's.

Great job! You have wonderful rhythm here; the words just flow together. :) The only comment I have is that I enjoyed the verses more than I did the chorus. ...

Amazing job! I could literally hear it on the radio (I made up my own little tune that I pictured with the lyrics)! :) You're really good! If this were ...

Wow. You really know how to give a reader a metal image. I felt like I was sitting right there next to Macey. Great story so far! :) I can't ...

Nicely done! I like your descriptions here! They have a certain...grace to them, if that makes sense. :) I'm very interested to see where you're going with this story, so ...

Haha, thanks! :) Yes, that would be so helpful in "real life". =D

Hi again! I decided to review this chapter as well since I reviewed the first. I like where this story is going and can't stand the suspense of what's going ...

First off, I just want you to know that I see a lot of potential in your writing. I love the storyline so far, and I must say that I ...

I liked the story you told here, but I feel like the timing and rhyming was a bit off. Who knows? Maybe I was reading it wrong. Overall, I think ...

Absolutely love this! I especially enjoy the story that you're telling. There is a ton of emotion hidden in it that just makes the poem that much better. Your rhythm ...

Sorry for the sudden ending in part one of chapter one, but I thought that posting the entire chapter in one posting would be a bit overwhelming. Also, this is ...