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You've got some excellent description here. However, you put way too many names and places and history whatnot right at the start. I'm horribly confused, and have absolutely no idea ...

how's it goin' Dusky baby! It seems we have both been lured here by the manipulating fingers of Nate! You have no idea.... Welcome Dusky! I'm a newbie as well! ...

This is a pretty good story with a lot of room for improvement. There are a few grammar mistakes, but those are easily fixed. You should consider adding more "flare" ...

Thanks! I just really wasn't sure if it was worth it to edit it before, but I definately will spend the next week or two doing that. It does need ...

Look, man, the only thing wrong with my grammar was that first sentence. As for more! I like playing video games, and I'm addicted to World of Warcraft right now. ...

Snow falls hard onto the cold ground on which a lone man lies down, waiting for death. It is so cold that his blood seems to freeze, no matter the ...

I was born in Norfolk, VA, but managed to make to the age of 14 and even further now to the age of 19. I go to a community college ...

The site's amazing! A lot better than I thought it would be ;) Now I'm off to write a story! What about? I have no idea.

This was posted a while ago, I know, but the title caught my eye. You really setup the detail well. "As it aged, technology and logic growing in the minds ...

Hi, I'm Nate's brother. It took me a while to register...how's things?