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I know what's in Wonderball... Well, I would if I hadn't eaten it.

Nope.

Excellent story! Wow, these kids have it rough, huh? I agree with Nate that you should change it to the third person. "We are used to this lack of privacy." ...

Thanks for the comments! I see what you mean about the "Days pass..." part. It is a bit odd. This was jsut some random story I wrote. I'm not really ...

*"the river flowing along with the ship" Saying "the ship flowing along with the river" might work a little better. *"The shadows shifted, though could barely be seen save by ...

Just one reply...please...I post feedback. Please? Just one comment? Is it good, or is it crap? Please, let me know.

He says he wants to be your friend, but then he slowly pulls you into the depths of ignorant oblivion. I remember once, long ago, I was a real boy. ...

I'm a monkey.

You mean like shaving your legs and stuff? Well, if it's your thing, I won't ask any questions. However, I love my hairy legs. I shave my face. I occaisonally ...

It's pretty good stuff. I noticed you tend to use the past perfect tense a lot (at least I think that's what it's called). For example, where you say "had ...

I posted this story a while ago, but now it's edited. Thanks for readin'! ------------ A lone man lies on the ground, straining to keep alive. It is so cold ...

Welcome to the site! Am I the only one who likes their name? Now, Nate, however, there's no fun in that. Consider yourself lucky with a name like Sarah.

Anyone here write music? I've never been able to write lyrics. I've got all the music and such laid out perfectly, but when it comes to writing words to go ...

Yeah, I really gotta stop handing out my personal information...all those perverts out there...maybe I should consider cancelling my credit card after all of those rather odd transactions...

It's good, although it does seems a little rushed at the end. Keep writing it! I need my fix!