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Thanks a lot for the comments! They are unique, Though they see the bleak Reflected scenery. Sounds a lot better than what I have. Yeah, a lot of em were ...

“Why are you scared?” he said to her. “Why are you scared? Why not just take the risk?” “I don’t want to tell you.” “Why?” The man is impatient. There ...

Good stuff. I know how ya feel :/

Mark the eyes. They tell all. They can be deceiving, Or believing, And you must listen. They are truth. They do not lie. If they see the sky, They also ...

It's repetitive. Sometimes that works, but it's not often. I really don't see it working here. What I think you should do is have three four-line stanzas, each one starting ...

I can tell for sure that this is a rough draft. Overall, it's pretty good. However, you could change around the wording in a few places to make it flow ...

Thanks a lot for the feedback!

To call you, Just to say sorry. Forgive me, In return for a smile. Maybe you can hug me, Or give a kiss. I wouldn’t mind. Stay friends? I wouldn’t ...

Great poem! I too know how fun it is to grow up in the suburban paradise. There a couple things that could be changed to make it flow better. Here: ...

Good stuff, Lee!

Pearl Jam and Dave Matthews are the best! REM Foo Fighters Michelle Branch ( my lover) The Skirts Sum 41 The Offspring (is kinda alright) Barenaked Ladies Oasis

I got a tad confused while reading this, although it's a good story. And man! I wish it were a hot summer day, but it's snowing outside....:(

Holy crap! (Is that a curse? I don't know). These are great! I love the last couple of verses. This is frekain' excellent.

It's better than I could...which isn't exactly saying much...It's grrrreat!

I agree with the previous posts. I like the idea, but you don't present the idea very well. Before I start, I want to say I know it's hard to ...