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Hi fictionfanatic! Reading this I get the feeling that you have some pretty strong feelings twisted deep inside. This little letter briefly exposes them...but we don't get to learn much ...

Hi Rose! As always, your writing is filled with wonderful imagery. I agree with what you have said, it does seem choppy. It is beautifully honest in the way journal ...

First of all, there are many good things here! Rose, your control of words creates such brilliant images. Each line is like a little picture; I'm amazed by what you ...

Thanks for the comments, guys! They were all very helpful and I will definitely include your advice in my revisions. The biggest problem with it is probably the repetitive prose, ...

I've been digging up old stuff. This one is from last year written about some time in my childhood. See, I used to catch all sorts of animals: butterflies, lizards, ...

but honestly, if i could have read this aloud, i think my lengthy, philosophically rampant, sentences would make much more sense; considering i wanted that description of the 'pursuing death' ...

Hi Mockingbird! I'm so glad you submitted this--I love scary stories! The creepy parts were excellent but there are some things I would like to address, the most dire being ...

P.S. I'm not really sure what happened at the end. Who is Hayes? Is it like...a book within a book? Or...well, I'm intrigued.

Hi Spork! I enjoyed reading your piece. Usually I turn and run from such a long post, but your story captured my interest until the very end. What an original ...

Hmnmn. This is interesting. I'm not exactly sure what to think about it. There were thinks I liked and things I didn't like and things I didn't like at first ...

I was expecting some tragic/horrific story about the giant pittbull or rottwieler (or some other stereotypical dog associated with vicious behavior) who menaced you with bared teeth at a young ...

As a disclaimer: If you are confused in any way by this review I would be delighted to explain it if you contact me personally! This piece is full of ...

Ah, Rellety that is a wonderful suggestion! I will definitely add that to the end of my piece. And as to the philosophy behind it...well, I was half-asleep at best ...

Well, I don't really know what to think of this yet. It's very new, and fresh, and raw. I plan on going back and editing it a few times this ...

I posted an incomplete draft of this a few months ago. Since I'm somewhat it OK to post an edited story as something completely new, or am I supposed to ...