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I really like this poem The premise is cliched but you're idea isn't, which brings freshness to it. But the first to lines kind of didn't do the rest of ...

This is a really good poem, but honestly, I'm kind of confused. When I read this, I was really sure what I was reading. To me, it just looked like ...

I like the premise of this poem, but personally it could use some more. Words, I mean. It hits hard, and I know it exudes mystery, but it doesn't need ...

Wow. Ok I'm having a serious sense of AWESOMENESS. Haha ok that sounded like such a teenage girl thing to say... But what else did you expect? The only thing ...

I edited and everything so I hope it still works. Please tell me if it doesn't. Your comments really helped.

You're freaking out about tomorrow What to wear, what to say, Plotting who you'll play, To me it's just another day. Ask if I like you're shining hair You break ...

Hey! I really like this poem and how you used alas. I know that sounds random but I absolutly LOVE old English. Anywoo, you seemed to encorperate all of the ...

Wow. This was great to read and I love the moderness of it. It has a lot of truth to it, and you really know how to draw readers in. ...

How many people do you know, That go home and write a sucide note? Who hope that one day they can take their own lives, Who everyday have to live ...

Being those who we are yet to know Why do they tell us to walk in their shoes? We are an interesting people Advising when we have no help to ...

It's a great poem and it's about some real life stuff that we all have to go through There was only one questionable part for me "This room wasn't giving ...

This poem reminds me of a really good book, I can't remember which one, that was about secret lovers that could never be seen together or anything and I love ...

For starters, I really, REALLY love this peice It takes everyday things that we all have to deal with and puts it all into context Personally, I love the deepness ...

This poem is really deep and dark and very very true The pain sounds so real, it's very emotional But if you got rid of the big spacing it would ...

So I like the poem, and the idea of it But it's very repetitive In my opinion, just say what you mean the first time It makes much more sense ...