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Chapter eleven Almost the instant I agreed to help fight for his army, Solomon began briefing us for our mission. He was halfway through an explanation of where there were ...

Chapter ten When I woke the next morning, Sarah had already left the tent, and was outside preparing some kind of concoction. I got up, and ate breakfast silently with ...

Chapter nine I woke up the next day sore and in tears. The bittersweet taste of a nostalgic dream lingered for a moment before fading into misery. I stood up ...

I really did like this, particularly for two main reasons. First, your command of the english language is pretty impressive, as you were using words that I seldom remeber to ...

wow. Ok, that was pretty depressing. It was pretty well done however, as it must have been difficult to write from the perspective of a young child. In this respect ...

I think this was very well done, and I certainly enjoyed reading it. I think the strongest thing about this piece is the unusual presentation. For instance, the inner debate ...

I particularly enjoyed this poem. I'm sure you can guess why. Yep, I'm a Christian too! Anyone who is a Christian or has come into contact with them will be ...

This was an enjoyable read, primarily because it was so dramatic. A lot of works can talk about combat and violence with little impact on the reader, but you managed ...

This was an interesting read, and I must say that I particularly liked the first paragraph or two. Switching on and off between the woman commenting on her and her ...

This was pretty good, but certainly not as good as previous chapters. In short, it could be made better by being made more clear. I was struggling to understand a ...

I found this to be very intriguing, and definately want to read more. You have a great hook, using very few words, and that by itself is impressive. Imagry is ...

Hi waysock, welcome to YWS! As you have probably figured out by now, this place is pretty awesome. Our top admin and creator of the site, nate, likes to spice ...

This piece was very well done, and I have to say I enjoyed reading it. You do very well with description and mood, both of which help draw the reader ...

Fair warning, you did tell me I could be brutal :) One thing I’ve noticed about life is there are a lot of “supposed to’s”. I’m supposed to do my ...

This was interesting, and certainly intriguing. The style is different than most, as many people are on the fence between first person narration and third person narration, completely ignoring the ...