psudiname

Mark was a musician. He aspired to be the best trumpet player in the entire underground city, and practiced at least an hour a day. In fact, with only ten ...

Kyle was dreadfully bored. This was not all that uncommon, due mostly to the fact that there was nothing in life that could quench his insatiable need to exercise. And ...

all in all an interesting story. i would advise you to continue writing, because #1 i'd like to read more, and #2 the more you get out on paper, the ...

I agree with Mo, so I'll call you Cat if that's alright. anyway, if you ever need to have work read and commented on, just PM me, as it would ...

hey banana, its Psudiname here, and welcome to YWS, which is probably the last writing web site in the world that is still active. if you're looking for a new ...

i am a writer. however i am assuming you already guessed that. if you would like to hear a little bit about who i am, dont read this forum, go ...

i dont know if you've ever read "the hunger games" but your charecter reminds me of an older more experienced version of Katniss. the way she has the fate of ...

wow, this story is intense. i highly advise you to look up the song requiem for a dream on youtube, and listen to it while reading this story. anyway, you ...

pretty good story, especially charecter development. that will certainly come in handy if the main charecter's life is ever threatened, because if you develop his charecter enough, the readers might ...

so you're going to have to explain something to me, because now i'm curious. 1) isn't ara like superhuman or somthing? i mean i know it was only just once, ...

I apologize for that, and i hope now it's in pieces that are a little more bite sized. feel free to comment on the individual chapters now...

ok, I have to ask, is the whole 'nero' thing allagorical? just wondering, because it's not often you name a charecter after the mass murderer of hundreds of christians... anyway, ...

great story, you should definatly continue writing, as i would be glad to read more of this as you write it. anyway, i know what the other people said, but ...

chapter one Kyle was dreadfully bored. This was not all that uncommon, due mostly to the fact that there was nothing in life that could quench his insatiable need to ...