psudiname

hey there, it's Psudiname, and I would like some of my stuff reviewed. if you could review the first three chapters of my unfinished novel i would be happy. I ...

Chapter three: to war Caleb could not remember ever being this happy. His whole body was permeated with a euphoria that came from hope for the future. Caleb was going ...

hi monoga! welcome to YWS. i'm sure you'll like it here, since everyone is friendly, and you'll get a lot better if you listen to peoples reviews. if you ever ...

so i'm really liking this, and i'll be interested to see where it goes. i liked the premise, and I think it's pretty original and I think there's a lot ...

the plot so far seems bland and ordinary, so i think it would be best to add something that really gets peoples attention, and makes them interested in what's going ...

hey, it's me again, and you'll be happy to know i really enjoyed reading this. to begin, I like the way you set the mood of hopelessness and opression. it ...

you struck a nice balence between suspense and charecter development, and did a good job of hooking the reader in. i liked the theme, but i'm certainly biased because i've ...

Chapter two: the sergeant "Damn it's cold." "Oh shut up, you've been saying that ever since we got here." "But it is." "Yes private Einstein, we've established that it's cold. ...

yeah, about the whole accent thing, my thought was that he was eight when they took him, so he still had the accent, but because of stockholm syndrom and assimilation ...

first let me say that i REALLY loved this story. oddly, it always had my attention. as i was reading, it was as if i was there, watching the story ...

hi isaac, i'm Psudiname and i'll be reviewing you today. in my opinion, a story is perfect when it has four things: charecter development, plot, description, and pizazz (or however ...

Caleb yawned. He was getting bored with simulations and games. Putting down his plastic AK47, Caleb walked to the intercom and asked in Russian for his butler to get him ...

The next morning, all he could think about was his plan for the afternoon. He had decided to go through with it completely, and to accept whatever consequences came along ...

Three weeks passed, and Kyle had trained harder than he had in his entire life. He was now able to scale the tower with ease, going in any direction, and ...

After his morning workout, and his breakfast, Kyle went to be taught by Gramm, who announced that the safest place to be in the jungle (besides a safe zone) was ...