politicaltinkerbell

So bitter is the end So bitter it tastes like sugar Through tears and blur you stare And darkness stares back at you Stomach turns, palms sweat And you must ...

I liked the last two sentences. Nice imagery indeed. The emotion is well brought forward. I'm tracing my mind for any crititical comments or suggestions, but nothing.....I guess it's just ...

Good job, especially considering your age. It's short but zingy and it captures, which is good. Indeed It would be better to make both the I am alive and I ...