pmye

I like how tragic your story was, but I found the story line hard to follow. Also, i wonder if you could show, not tell. But I like the fact ...

I really like the idea of your story. I like the way you describe the characters. I wish you could give us more of a hint of what Bartholomew did ...

I like your story. I wonder if you could cut down on the dialogue, and work on describing the story more. I love how your story is easy to follow, ...