piepiemann22

I think it's good, but a few things could be better. Like when T.J tells Simon he knows he likes Emma he goes into a rage without much cause. Other ...

I seems to have the meaning of wanting to be free. Thats good. Give all af your pieces meaning if you can. As for a haiku I believe it's very ...

It's not bad for a first poem. Mine wasn't that good either. though I did like how you spoke of something with a meaning to yourself. Poetry is inspired by ...

I agree with others everything except one point. You writing comes from the heart like mine does, try reading some. In the end it doesn't matter what other people think ...

I don't agree with rosethorn. The last line is a perfect ending to it all. I also liked how you seemed to put your heart into the piece. thats what ...

I believe it's good, but it lacks color in my oppinion. There's emotion, but where's it coming from. When I think of emotional poetry I think the write should feel ...

When I think about it it does conect to your story. Nicely done

This poem makes no sense. At the very least a poem sould speak from the heart and soul. This has no meaning or feeling to it. Give your next piece ...

As the sun rises I am born anew. The shadow I feared is gone. Life is returning to everything I know. I am now free, with a new awakening.

I like it. It seems to speak from the heart like poetry should. Though I can't make out the moral. Though saying that I do get one thing from it. ...

I believe it's pretty good. Your begining was good, but it looks like you rushed through the ending. Out of knowwere a Lord of Darkness appears and he has no ...

Good, Very good,but there is one problem. Simon seems to take to his powers to easaly. He just all of a sudden believed in them. thats all I have to ...

not bad, better than anything I can write

You hear it, you feel it, you know something's wrong. You look behind you, but nothing's there. You fear everything around you, though nothing's there. You feel empty, forgotten, like ...

Me again. I'm going over your work and it's quiute good. I've learned a few tips, thanks. Your second verse is better. I belive it speaks more on what you ...