piepiemann22

I like it, but there isn't much meaning or feeling here. Looks like you just made a poem, but it is good.

First red some other poeples ideas. Then write your own.

Zelles was distracted by Aro for only a seconed, but the girl was gone. "What, your not going to follow her?" Asked Aro in a friendly voice. "I had no ...

"Damn, I can't hear anything and there is no sign of anyone. Wait, there, trakes." He follows them to a cliff. There stood a young red haired woman. He was ...

Good, but short. Also, you should space out your paragraphs.

The sun was shining as Zelles walk along the outer streatches of the Rallan Castel. After a peacefull time since the enemy attacks on the elves he's had alot of ...

Same with me. Name: Zelles Gender: male Race: ?-he looks like a human man, but he has the abbilities of an elf and man combined- he is not a half ...

Thank you, that's a very good. That was what I was geting at.

What is faith? Is it what we see, know hear feel or believe? Could it be, everything you once thought was true, is gone. Nothing but a lie. That's for ...

I belive there is rhyme in the flow. You can't see it. You must read it and listen t it. Only then will you be able to know.

Thank you both. The reason I seemed to rush through this Chapter was for suspense. To make the read go on to find out more.

The past tense isn't something I'm going to do. The reason why is this story will take about 6 books to finish. The romance thing is a good point, but ...

"You fool, what were you thinking? You could have been killed," said a young woman. "Only you would be so stupid." She wrapped a bandage around a young man's hand. ...

I like it because it's about Star Wars, but it's not in poetry format

I think it's a good poem. Though your flow is a little off. Ani's right, rhyming may help, but it's not needed. Try reading other poetry to get the right ...