piepiemann22

First, add punctuation it makes it flow and sound better. It isn't anything new. There are a lot of poems like this.

I know

A little

"Aro!" yelled Zelles as he clinbed out of the water. "So, what are you really my white haired friend." Zelles stoped in his trakes and turned, sword in hand. "To ...

hahaha. You seem to be enjoying yourself Matt.

As they met blades Zelles got a bad feeling. He looks behined himself to see the ranso standing there. "What?" Rin takes this chance to kick him into the water.

"So, your not dunb are you." Zelles looks behined him to see Rin standing there. "This is bad, very bad." Zelles grasps his sword waiting for his oponit to make ...

ZElles stsring at the sky he reakized it was geting late. "Aro." "Mm." "Rin is half vampire right?" "Yes. Why do you asked?" "If he's following us we my wish ...

"Aro, shut up about that now. Listen miss, I don't care if you hate us or not, but if we don't leave now we'll all be killed. Come with us ...

yay, any idea's. I'll start to think.

This poem does not seem new. Poems about love are always done, but that doesn't matter. The fact you wished to write it is all. The flow was good, but ...

It is very simple and not to new. The sructure does need work, but I'm sure you can do it. Don't worry, we all start somewhere. Keep trying.

I is a very simple poem. Not to much meaning or feeling, but I like it all the same.

Raiku was simply relaxing under an oak tree enjoying the warmth of the sun and the cool breeze flow through his hair. He got up with a yawn and streched. ...

Name: Riku Gender: male Age: 17 Hair: Gray, thick, Long over the eyes. Eyes: Brown Personality: Lazy, but does what he thinks is right and will fight when needed.