piepiemann22

I go with what Matt said. Poetry can be for fun, but it seems like you wont take it to heart.

Sorry, I take poetry to heart. That may be why I said that. That's just how I feel. It is only an oppinion.

I'm not judging her. I don't do that. I simply stated how I felt. If I hurt anyone in any way, I'm sorry.

You say this is about Tattoos, but i don't see how it fits. I mean, since you stated it, it seems to fit well. I just couldn't get that fact ...

That is true. It does bring him in more. This is getting interesting.

I like this poem, though it could use some work. Reread it to yourself and find more line breaks. You also need puncuation. Add thouse things and I'll give a ...

The writing and flow is good. But I don't like the poem all that much. I don't see how someone could write a poem like that. Then again everyone is ...

this truly is pointless. I know that was your intent, but please write with a meaning to. It isn't a bad poem. Just please keep that in mind.

okay, I'll trust you . The story is finally moving along.

Matt, why did you make a character like Zelles. It may mack it interesting, but you could have said something to me.

"This is becoming a really bad Idea on my part." He looks over at the two girls. Why me he said to himself. "Go." The girls just look at him. ...

Your begining grabs me alittle, but it isn't enough. I think you should write more before posting.

you may be right. I'll keep that in mind.

welcome

As the battle draged on both began to weaken. "How can you be this strong?" Asked Rin in a blaze of anger. Zelles paid no attention to what he said. ...