phoenixwriter

Sorry, everyone. I feel like this chapter is lacking a lot, so I'd appreciate it if you left feedback. Thanks! She would come. He knew she would. The gleaming violet-flecked ...

Your plot seems pretty good, but I agree with IcyFlame. The viewer doesn't really have time to absorb other aspects of the story amid the quick events unfolding and the ...

If this were longer, I could give more advice on. But since it isn't, I will just make do with the length. This is written well. This seems not so ...

Hi, McMourning! Thanks for the review! I will follow your advice. Let me know if you want a particular work of yours reviewed!

You're descriptions are very vivid and descriptive. Very nicely done, first of all! I like how you say "it made my feel in control." It really gives the reader a ...

“Destroy the telescope during the diversion.” "What diversion?" She didn't answer. David considered asking again, but decided not to. Her blood smeared face seemed deep in thought as her icy ...

The chapter wasn't all that bad, from what you thought it was. So relax, first off. I can get Gemma's character, and everything is pretty well developed. Just a few ...

Holy Crud, do I feel ashamed of my writing when I read your's! This was excellent! I totally want to continue reading! This is amazing! I love what you're doing! ...

Thanks for your review! Again, let me know if you want me to review your stuff too. I will keep you advice in mind! Thanks again!

I like this feeling that you give to the words. Just a few tips, though. I don't really see the rhyming scheme, and you don't have to have a set ...

Like your profile picture, first of all. Snape kept freaking me out by turning every second to look at me, but it's pretty cool! Thanks for your review. I will ...

Thanks for reviewing! Let me know if you want me to review your stuff! I'd love to :)

Silvia’s teeth were bared. For a moment, David was reminded of the young white wolf at Witch's Canyon and recalled the feral and majestic expression on its face. “I will ...

Thanks for your help. You covered a lot of points no one else had gotten to. I like your ideas, and I appreciate your advice! It means a lot to ...

Very realistic, just like a newspaper thing. One thing. Can you connect how the beat-up girl relates to the little boy, Carson? That transition is a little foggy. Clear that ...