phoenixwriter

I like this poem a lot, but I don't really have many suggestions, since it's just fine the way it is... Maybe, "My imagination's blank," should be somewhat changed. I ...

Chapter Six: Wanderings Silvia woke up with a start. With astonishment visible in her icy royal blue eyes, she threw off a small blanket that she was certain hadn't been ...

Hi! First, I want to say I like the feeling you're giving readers as we read your words. I can feel your uncertainty beneath the poem itself. That's excellent! But ...

After failing at volleyball try-outs, tennis try-outs, and messing up at an audition, I vented my feelings in this poem. Enjoy. I'm sorry I was not good enough- not worthy ...

The Trojan horse stood tall and proud, so beautiful in the sun. Did my heart ever beat so loud, for you had certainly won. You won the day, you won ...

Thank you, everyone for your comments! I wrote this when I was in tears over my friend's latest hurtful behavior. As you can see, I put a lot of emotion ...

You're supposed to life me up, comfort me, push me towards the sky. Instead you shove me down, scoff, and abandon my side. The bond between, the love between, rings ...

This is nicely written, like usual. I thought your dialogue was well-written and tasteful. Have faith in your writing. However, I did catch a few grammar errors. Nothing big. "His ...

Thanks, Sophia! The advice I will follow ASAP! Thanks for the review! Phoenixwriter

Thanks, Narnia! Btw, I LOVE Narnia too! It's an awesome! But, to the point... I really appreciate the support. Phoenixwriter

This is really well written! I like how you described who noticed who first (griffin and mayor, girl and rider). I also like how you made a change. Usually it's ...

I want to applaud you on your descriptions. However, there are a few things I'd like to comment on. "Shut up you moron." A gruff voice said from somewhere infront ...

I like this a lot. This poem struck a chord inside of me when I read it, and it touched me for some reason... But now I'm going to do ...

Great start! Just one thing I caught: "normal timidness," mind, I'm not quoting directly. But, I think instead of telling the readers how timid she is, she should show us ...

First off, this is an excellent beginning! Your characterization is wonderful, detailed, and clear. I love how you show how Scarlett is different, a little aggressive (I love the aggressive ...