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Yo, this story is in a genre which I really don't sympathize with, but as an amateur to an amateur, here are three examples of prose that I though need ...

Hi, as usual with poetry, I'll paste the bit which had most impact for me: Walking down the tunnel of trees, The wind keeps in step a little way behind ...

Well, I could totally imagine this as a movie, or a cartoon, or a comic book. Starts quickly, immediate crisis, hints of overal situation - good! Here's my detailed semi-advice ...

Right, that was a fine start of a story, the prose is really OK, no major problems. Paragraphs seem to have fallen apart though. Anyhow, the two major things are ...

In order to learn to write we must read the leaders of the literary fields. Luckily we live in the 21-st century, and the Internet offers free access to some ...

And lo the Lord said striketh downeth the Wicca with thy stone or sea shell or knobby sticketh upon the Wiccan cranium, for the trumpet of the glory calls the ...

Parker, thank you for your detailed feedback. Do keep in mind please, if I ever do enter the mood for someone to bully me for my own good into conforming ...

Parker, thank you for your detailed feedback. Do keep in mind please, if I ever do enter the mood for someone to bully me for my own good into conforming ...

The feathers and whips of next winter shimmer, High over the rooftops, beyond the trees. A question is chorused in the chatter of insects: “But what about us, what about ...

Dear Empress, this poem reminded me of the Lila: An Inquiry into Morals philosophical novel by Robert M Pirsig, where similar internal events take place, but inside a man, and ...

Hi, this was the bit which plucked me out of my current space-time coordinates and sent me tumbling: "When I tip-toed along your bear-like snoring, To sleep next to mom ...

Oh yeah, Emmaline, I needed that :)

Justtrying, thanks very much. Acted on all advice except the name

I saw the wind stir up the clear surface, Expanding ripples flashing in the sun. It sent dry leaves to skate ahead with whispers, This squeezed my heart, I broke ...

Hi Abyss, that's a big story you have there. It clocks almost 10 000 words - that's in the Novelette category. It's a little book. You should probably break it ...