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IF YOU CAN'T SAY LOVE Aggie and I drink Canadian tea the ones that have too much sugar but we pretend we are lovers, she teases my hair and my ...

COMBINATION LOCK I'm done struggling, she says with her lab coat and her curls and so then Dom has to roll his eyes and go to her box and fetch ...

Like a shadow he enters my realm, my solitude Darkening my thoughts and purging the light. He whispers harsh, seductive, daring words Pulling me to desperate action. first thing, sorta ...

liked 'knots creak.' and 'radar-bats.' That last poem in particular has a really strong ending. Love the string of organic details. Really vivid. best,

if you'd like comments only about punctuation, I'd say you don't need about 75% of the commas you used. You especially don't need them at the end of lines, usually ...

This poem is as you say, personal, but not much more. I felt like the big fancy words were wasting my time, over modifying certain phrases and nouns into meaninglessness. ...

alphabet spinster, with needle and thread and slow syllables collected like buttons in a bag, she speaks soft with a voice like thrush in the wind and there is a ...

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Ryan: es posible. I'd actually call it a work of creative nonfiction :P

I definitely like it better than the other piece. I particularly liked the third stanza. Sushi Bad Sushi Bad. I liked that idea. also "and maybe butterflies feel relieved when ...

i am wondering why random words are capitalized. Bear, sew, seems. Are these typos or was it intentional. If it was intentional then, well, the way we'd say it in ...

some good stuff going on, but one suggestion I have is to avoid the words like 'beautiful,' and 'beauty'. I've noticed you use them a lot. It's easy to describe ...