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I don't like being told how to review :P the word deity seems to be misused? Either that or I didn't understand the line. Also I am unfamiliar with that ...

David Berman, Bob Hicock, Federico Garcia Lorca, James Tate, Ted Kooser, others

the song is by three doors down. How do I know that ? Because I once was in middle school. This is a highly sentimental piece that relies heavily on ...

I find this piece semi-impenetrable. It has the same cryptic flair that most of your work seems to have, everything coated in this enigmatic style that seems to border on ...

this is sort of epic, I... I like how blue this poem is, the atmosphere... it really creates this rainy miasma of ocean waves and brine. Its good that you ...

you don't need to modify shirt with "whiteness of." Also I didn't like the string of 'ing' words, and I didn't get the 'no less alien' line. 'Dark windows to ...

what I know about photography is limited to non-digital cameras and darkrooms and while I like the atmosphere of the picture... the figure sort of looks headless. Maybe that's just ...

might be best to read this after you read the poem: this is an intensely personal poem. It is an attempt to write something personal without becoming maudlin, without sacrificing ...

this piece shows impressive facility with language... almost reminds me of something I'd write ;). There are some great lines in here, tenor tills the tin... matte scene jury rigged ...

I don't know. It's okay, but it doesn't pack much of a punch. It is intensely personal, and I think the fact that I can tell from reading it may ...

I'm getting adjective / adverb overload. This is the problem when people only take a few minutes to write something. You may not think it shows, but it does. Take ...

no... the archaic words are not working. Write a contemporary poem for goodness sakes. And why is there a dash at the end of every line? Not necessary. I don't ...

the best one was the first and the last. The first because the seamless transition, the last because the effortlessness in which it was transformed. Fun exercise! Kind of reminds ...

re: Benway so let me get this straight you're drinking something that you are drinking to. like buying around a whiskey for all your friends and raising your glass and ...

luckless because its a reference to a science fiction novel by Larry Niven in which a couple of dudes are in a floating mansion trying to locate a woman who ...