parigirle

Hi there! I'm Pari. :D So this is a little confusing. I think you should establish the MC a little better. We know absolutely nothing about her at this point ...

There's really nothing for me to submit right now, but I recently discovered a love for critiquing, not least of all because I know that critiques can be story-saving sometimes. ...

Hi!(: I know there's a part one, and I read it, so don't worry about that. Um... the wound, did she get injured in the previous fight? I didn't see ...

Hi there(: Alright, firstly, I like the story. The plot is interesting and the idea is a good one; it's emotional and sweet. But there's a major problem: it's moving ...

Hi everyone, I'm Pari(: I don't usually post an introduction if I join a forum or something - I guess I'm a bit too shy. But I've been lurking, and ...