paraperson

“Fine.” I rummaged through my drawers, nothing taken. I saw my dagger where I hid it. Tracing the designs, I accidentally cut myself on the blade. When the first drop ...

It's finally here! I know it's been way too long since I last posted anything of Totem, and for that I deeply apologize. I don't think this is an extremely ...

I love this so much!!! The feeling, the flow, how elegant it is while at the same time dark and a little morbid... I love it all!!! I'll admit that ...

Hiya there! This was a really interesting start. You've got great suspense going and I can already tell that Toni and Hayden are a cute couple despite their contrast. I ...

Hi there! Welcome to YWS! :) Now, I'm not a poem-writer, so I'm not going to pick at the mechanics. I just want to say that this poem is so ...

Hi there! First, I wanted to say that I really enjoyed this. I mean, it pretty much shows just how intimate an author's relationship with his/her characters have to be. ...

Sorry, paragraph format might not be perfect... The only person who met my eyes on my way to the library was a boy, about 11 years of age, covered with ...

You've got something good going on here! I like it, but I think it could be improved. Try adding more detail, thoughts, and feelings, maybe even talk more about Ivo's ...

This was really good. Definitely short, but amazing. And I'm really, really curious about Ares's past... please bring it up soon! You end your chapters at all the right places, ...

This was simply beautiful. I know this isn't going to help you at all, but I think it's pretty perfect. I think I've fallen in love with those first four ...

I'm not exactly a nonfiction writer or reader, so my advice might not be the best out there, but I'll do my best! I definitely think you could build off ...

I love Ares! He's a great character and a very real character, which, of course, is always important. One thing I'd suggest (now I might sound a little hypocritical here, ...

Hey, it's Paraperson! I haven't posted anything since the dawn of time, it seems, so here's a little something for you. I actually found this on my computer one night ...

Yesterday, I saw big purple elephants eating my house. They sucked out my book shelves and ate my Oscar Wilde collection. And the Foxtrot comic book that was drenched in ...

Wow! That was deep and really short, which is a combination that I absolutely love. The writing is very simple while the meaning can be thought of in many different ...