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I don't understand this expression, sorry: "she's a caretaker that way"?

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Yay, a new instalment! Stop teasing us with the true story of what happened to Marisol. I'd really like to know what really happened - it was so annoying when ...

You're a stubborn lady%u2026 I hope it's helpful when you do the rewrites. Sorry, this wasn't my favorite chapter overall, not that it was bad but it felt a little ...

Thanks for the review. I'll take your comments into account when I rewrite this part of the story. Have a good review day too.

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I don't know how I'd react, honest. It's like a miracle, but at the same time...

I don't know how I'd react, honest. It's like a miracle, but at the same time...

Ah, I knew it! I knew it!

Good luck with that.

I can't wait to read the new version, then. I've got nothing against a good romantic subplot, but it felt a little rushed. I liked it, but I'd like it ...

and you cut out everything you don't NEED

Clearly, you'll have to steamline the plot in re-writing. King's advice is to give yourself a specific numerical target. Maybe you should also cut the story in parts, sections, chapters, ...

I was watching a review of 50 shades as an adaptation and they were analysing why the initial interaction between Ana and Grey was better in the movie. She asks ...

Maybe we could know what happens when they go for that coffee, with Kiernan trying to get info out of Ben, and Ben unintentionally charming him. That way, it feels ...

xD Good wedding, as I said.

I know. When you get boggled-down with the logistics, you often make it sound plot-convenient, so I'd really thin down the plot: maybe no change of caves, as it doesn't ...