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Hehehe...you bet I am. It's going under Bloody Money as I write it and basically my project of a lifetime. It all started in ancient times. A girl was exiled ...

It's beautiful. The voice is unique, the imagery is not overdone, and the flow is wonderful. The build up is great, and the ending is rather simple, but complete. I ...

Haha! Great beginning, I must say. It really pulls somebody and makes them curious. I already like Dilbert. He sounds like a little lovestruck puppy and Angel is oblivious to ...

It's just what Horseback said, the sentence form is a bit childish. Add a variety of lengths and play around with a few sentences. Otherwise I feel like the narrator ...

This is a great poem! You're not being unpatriotic because it's all true. If we are proud, then we should be proud of our faults also. I would love to ...

It's interesting, and I like the rhyme scheme. As the reviewer before me said, the second stanza was rather choppy. I would've prefered that you kept the five line rhyme ...

I am a homosexual. There, I said it. I like men. I am gay. I am a homosexual. I bury my head into my pillow, groaning. It's all too much ...

Add more emotion. This is too peppy for a suicide story. I mean, I can't feel for the character, nor do I get the feeling of depression. It seems like ...

Right from the start I am pulled in, and I can't tear it apart because of that. I'm going to do a mild review however. The grammar is good and ...

I liked it a lot. It was very funny and anticlimatic at the end. I feel the same way also when I'm writing a new story, except the old characters ...

I love the rhyme. It really unwinded me after reading it. I love the rhyme scheme and it reminded me of Poe's rhymes. That made me happy since I barely ...

Meena~ What just...I don't... Meena looked around her, her eyes big as she saw that everything was huge. Then she noticed her tail. It was taunting her. I'll show you ...

This is a powerful story and I could see the hurt in it all. I'm sorry that you had/have to go through bullying like that. Those people are simply arrogant ...

This is an interesting scene and it's well written. I can't find any grammatical or spelling issues within this. The feelings are shown through this and I can imagine this ...

This is an interesting scene and it's well written. I can't find any grammatical or spelling issues within this. The feelings are shown through this and I can imagine this ...