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Hello! I really enjoyed reading this poem. The imagery was rather magnificent. However, what drew me away was the fact that there was little punctuation and capatilization. Here's my edit ...

Very interesting and original. I also love the comparison. Though I'm not sure how your friemds could be slain during love, but I can imagine it. I love the last ...

It's interesting. It just doesn't follow a journal format. He wouldn't know beforehand that the end of the world was coming. If it already happened then he would have stated ...

Chapter Two: Changes in the wind As the summer progressed, the girl named Lucy bothered me even more. When I came to the park, she sat on the swing, kicking ...

It's a very nice poem and it pulls at the heartstrings. I feel a lot of your pain, and I am truely sorry that you went through that. However I ...

The thin rope is slowly unraveling under your weight. Every single step bringing you closer to the fall.

Interesting, I love the flow of it and the tranquil picture it paints. It's quite beautiful. My only suggestion is to include the meaning of coqui because I hate looking ...

Nice next chapter, though it's missing the craziness from before. I mean stark raving mad crazy rant you had on. I like how you show his home life, a bit ...

Heat on her face, radiating to her toes. Breaths on her shoulder, whispers in her ear. That shuddering sensation. They're tickling her, moving up her body. She lets out a ...

Aw okay. All the other houses is filled I think, so just forget about it.

Well this is an awesome piece of work. The title made me a bit wary (after all this is YWS and it could just be all sweet), but the first ...

TOTALLY WANT TO JOIN!!!! Name: Adrian Devon Da'Venti Age/ What year are you?: 15, year 5 Pureblood or Muggle?: Muggle-born Appearance: about 6'4", lean, bright green eyes, long black hair ...

Chapter One “For death begins with life’s first breath and life begins with at the touch of death.” The first thing Madara noticed was the colors. They danced around him, ...

Drifting... Eyes blood red. Drifting... So easily led. Drifting... One false step. Drifting... She fell through the clouds. A/N: Can be taken literally and figuratively. One of the few poems ...

Very interesting and abstract. I like it a lot. I don't really care to critique poetry so much, but this is very interesting. I like the imagery a lot. The ...