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I actually loved "Fledgling". It's simple and sweet. As TedusCloud says, it's a metaphor not overly used. I think you should put a little more imagery in it and maybe ...

Okay, it is a sweet poem and the best are the spur-of-the-moment poems. There are few things that could make it better. The first line: She makes a rainbow look ...

You make the reader feel and you give them a good impression. It is very good. I can't find anything really to critique. The only thing is that when you ...

Well this is a very interesting twist on the garden of eden story. I find this very interesting. Is there a reason why Cain is in his name? Will he ...

So I love reading poetry but not really up for reviewing. To me, judging the grammar is hard because some poets don't like grammar. I think yours is fine. No ...

It's crazy to see our blood flowing, ain't it, from the knife that we killed that ho who was showing? As if we liked pain. We don't or we do. ...

I like the flow of this. A thing I caught was that "feel hin in side me" should be "feel him inside me". You should either keep it all in ...

Haha, I like this. It made my day! What would happen if you dated a girl ninja? Haha it was fun to read.

It catches my attention and the beginning is good. I understand that it is meant be vague (and I don't mind that) BUT it is too vague. You switch from ...

How interesting! A few lines were hard to understand but all in all very interesting. The end makes me giggle evilly. The change in rhyme pattern threw me off. I ...

This is very interesting and moves you reader. The only problems with it is that it needs punctuation and capitals. Other than that it is very good. The beginning is ...

AN: My wish this year. Dear Mr. Santa Klaus, Every year I demand something new like an Xbox 360 or another gift I think is "cool." This year is not ...

Well, I like it. It's short and sweet and to the point. I think that eulogy is a perfect word, but through me off a little. All in all, good ...

Well I think we all feel this and I am glad you wrote this because this is something I feel right now. I think you need to put different stanzas ...

I hate that you put that note at the beginning because, although it doesn't make any sense, I actually liked reading it and pulled something really deep out of it. ...