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Okay not sure if this will fit in with your poem, but where you say side and hides, it sounds odd. What about, "I put my hand to one of ...

Just looking for the memories of your love I yearn for your fingers to heal me Just wanted to point out that these two lines are written SO beautifully! Great ...

Stunning. It looks like you put a lot of thought into this. Keep up the great work! Pandora

I have no idea. Sorry! Pandora

Really creepy. But good nonetheless. Like Elizabeth?^^^ said, it leaves little to the imagination. It should be a bit more mysterious. Make us think about what happened. Love the first ...

That was really long, but great! I'd love to see more! Pandora

Oh wow! That was awesome! You should definatley write more poems. I would love to read more of your work. Dani

Depression is realization of reality. For some reason, I really like this. It sounds scholarly. It sounds like it's from the heart. Maybe I wanted to be in here…ever think ...

I really like this, it seems like you put a lot of feeling into it and it turned out very nice. Pandora

I reread my message earlier ^^^ and saw that in the explanation of the orphan thing, I said her father was in on it, but in the actual story, I ...

Well, I wrote that she only shuddered, because like I said before, she was chained. She could barely move, let alone back into a corner. Also, the word 'minute' does ...

Love is like an onion. There's different layers to it:Romantic, freindly, family oriented... Pandora

The Black crayon is an outcast. Shunned by those he once shared a box with, Claims from others he isn't a "real" color, Away from others he stays, But he ...

Okay this is my first story on TYWS...I'm nervous, I must admit, but I thought it'd be good for me. Please critique this and be honest. Thanks! (OH! And I'm ...

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