pandoraswritings

“Number, please.” The lunch lady who Cassie could care less what her name is. You forgot "said" here. You did this in a few other places too. Y ou desperately ...

When c.d players were cool. When Ken and Barbie were still together. Pandora

This sounds like it's going to be a great story. A bit of spelling errors, but very nice. I'm not positive of this, so check it before you do anything, ...

I usually don't read sci-fi,but this was pretty good! I liked the ending. Unique Pandora

They say life is what you make it, But what if you only fake it, The insults they throw, you sit and take it, And the feeling inside, you can ...

Wow, shuddered reading this. It was creepy, but it was a good creepy. It was very good. I look forward to reading more of your poetry. I liked how you ...

Pretty. Welocome to TYWS. Pandora

I LOVED LOVED LOVED two lines in particular. First, "But I say it jumped" and second "If it is a stubborn nut". AMAZING. And this is overall a good poem. ...

Okay, wow, this was long. Try putting it into a few bulletions, part one, two three. Pandora Oh and welcome to TYWS!

I liked most of it, a few lines, I thought, weren't as good, but still very nice. Pandora

I liked this one. It was well written and although you did not use larger words, it fit well. Great job! Pandora

First of all, put this through spell check. Never use the &sign, say "and". "To" should be "too" Capatalize "I" Now, I did not like this. It was not very ...

I don't really like this. The words are all very small and very elementary. It has emotion, which many poems don't have, which is a plus, but it lacks diction. ...

I really didn't like this. How is ther a zoo in your head, how is there a wardrobe? I understand tears unshed and laughter, but this is confusing. Pandora

No, keep trying. You'll get it sooner or later. Most of the people here have been writing for EVER! Pandora