pandoraswritings

My name is Dani and I've been writing for a few years. Until recently, I loved this site. Some of the people hurt the way they critique and I can't ...

You drank, You hit, You yelled, You cried... You swore, You spent, You wasted, You dealed... You loved, You lived, You stayed, You knew... You hissed, You beat, You stomped, ...

Thoughts go in and out of my head looking up into the sky seeing my reflection in the window. Tears fill my eyes but do you even know. Shouldn't this ...

I agree with Claudette. You give away too much stuff and don't really need to. Instead try spacing things out more. And yes, Cassandra, I think it is supposed to ...

When I graduated Junior High, I remember telling myself I’d be the same, Crazy and fun, And full of spunk. When I graduated Junior High, I remember telling myself I’d ...

Truthfully Cicero, I didn't like this at all. It makes little sense and as he^ said, if you're going to write about "me me me", you need to give us ...

When you say "Your no better than me", it needs to say "You're no better.." It's You are no better, not your no... Anyways, regardless of what they ^^^ say, ...

This is nice, but I'm not sure it should be written without any puncuation marks... Pandora

I stop and smile, And think a while, At the things that can not be. Like a homeless man, You see now and then, Trying to find his way. And ...

That was wierd. Pandora

That's funny. I couldn't stop laughing at the ham part. Genius. But if this is a script, you might want to make her actually say she is eating a ham ...

First off, let me say that this is a beautiful piece. But... When you say "He picks up a yellow crayon...", do you mean the teacher or a student? It's ...

I like it. It's kind of hard to follow though. Great job. Pandora

Nice poem. It seems like you put a lot of emotion into it. PS: Your signature "Save the earth! It's to only planet with chocolate." is cute, but should "to" ...

MORE When he reached it, he got on is knees and peered in though one of the slats. Inside, were a multitude of guns. Mostly machine guns and pistols. When ...