paintingtherain97

This has the potential to be a good poem, but to be honest, the form needs a lot of work. You should keep it organized with lines and stanzas. Also, ...

This is amazing. The rhyme scheme is original and good. I didn't see any mistakes in grammar. The only thing is that the last line seems a bit bulky with ...

I love this. I've never actually read something that was written in the second-person form before this, and it's really unique and interesting. I like how you described the passage ...

I like this. It's really blunt and honest and emotional and raw. The syllables are balanced and it isn't too lengthy or anything. I hope you keep writing. This is ...

Thanks :)

I liked it. You should try to clear up the tenses a little bit because you kind of alternate between past and present. I like the way you described the ...

This isn't bad. The syllabic content is a bit unbalanced, and the story is a little bit labyrinthe. Other than that, though, it's clever and original and just really unique. ...

This poem rocks! People write way too many sappy romance things about sunsets and blah blah blah. But this is about something that matters, and there's an actual message and ...

Wow! I love this. There were a few little grammar things you should probably edit, but the story is good so far. I hope you write more of it. I ...

In the land of white trash, there was a boy who gave a crap. His name was Mark E. Nash, and he just wouldn't shut his trap. When the kids ...

Thanks for the reviews. I'll work on it. Sorry if the rhymes were sort of forced. I'm new at this.

Thanks so much. I've been revising and revising this but a lot of people try to be too nice when they review and it doesn't help. Thanks for the honesty ...

Name: Adelice Hanx Gender: Female Type of Wielder: Enchantress Powers: Water and Storms Strengths: She is courageous and determined, with extreme skill on the water. She's very intuitive, more than ...

This is interesting and really good, but you should probably try to condense it a little and maybe split it into seperate stanzas so the reader isn't overwhelmed. Other than ...

I like this. It's nice and short but the message is definitely clear, that country music sucks. I couldn't agree more. The rhyming is good, too. Good work. Keep it ...