paintingtherain97

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Thanks for the reviews. I'll work on it. Sorry if the rhymes were sort of forced. I'm new at this. Lol demoness. I just like reviewing and don't have a ...

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This is really good. The rhyme scheme and rhythm work well, almost flawless. The message is pretty clear, too. I didn't see anything grammatical but you should probably try to ...

Thanks. I'll work on it.

This is a great poem. There is a bit of messy grammar, in one case a word being repeated twice, but that is beside the point and quite easily fixed. ...

This is absolutely amazing! The emotions in it are so real and it perfetly summarizes the tragedies of war. It's like how we were "helping" in the Middle East. I ...

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Her eyes are glassy as she tries to look perfect and nice and classy for the one guy worth it. As he pulls up to the house she fluffs her ...

This isn't bad. I like the truthful emotion of it, although it was a bit ranty, you know? But I like the overall poem. Maybe to make it more interesting ...

If I were to stumble upon the Mirror of Erised, I would honestly get freaked out. When I look into a mirror, I expect to see my mousy hair and ...

This is a good story, though I've got a few suggestions if you want to improve it. For one thing, your tenses aren't very consistent. You keep alternating between past ...

I thought this was pretty good. You did have a few little grammar things you should go back and check, though. It seems a bit short to really be a ...

This is a nice little memoir, although a bit simplistic. If you want to add a little meat to it, maybe you should increase the details. For example, how did ...

This is a really good start. I like the melancholy tone you've set, also the way it seems to be told from memories, the character reminiscing about her dead friend. ...