paintingtherain97

This is good! It's simple and to-the-point, but it still has the full emotion and meaning of a more complex poem. The rhymes are great, like perfect. The syllabic balance ...

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Do you see, in the corner of the room, that kid gazing out the window, there eyes listless and their hearts determined to give up? Do you see that pale ...

This is great! Your rhyming was good, and the message was definitely clear. Keep it up.

Thanks and I didn't mean to offend anyone. I'm a wallflower myself.

This is really good. It's not often that you see acrostic poems on the Young Writers Society website. Usually, acrostics are shallow, simple-minded, but this one has meaning. The theme ...

Life is a library, with its dusty old pages and its sensation stories, so full of possibility. The words paint colors, from crimson-hued dragon to skies of pure azure. Some ...

First off, you seem to be a good writer. And, since you say this is a school assignment, I'll be straightforward. Things to improve: a few run-on sentences you should ...

This is really good! It's the sort of thing that I try to write, but better. So basically, the only real problems that I see are inconsistancies in tenses and ...

She looks just like him, I think as they take her away to wash and swaddle her. She has his chocolaty hair, his wide puppy-dog eyes, and his thickly lashed ...

Every face is a window to a person's fragile heart, whether curtains drawn or garish lights aglow, always the story's start. Each window's eyes are like the crack in the ...

Oh my God, I love this! Your language was absolutely perfect, with great imagery. I liked the part about spinning concrete webs of lies. It was pretty epic. And the ...

This is really good. And what you said in the beginning, about it maybe being in the wrong category, I think it probably goes into dramatic poetry because it's first ...

She walked into the church, her ordinarily immaculate appearance careless and bedraggled. Her blond hair that was usually braided and clipped hung in a messy ponytail, and she was wearing ...

She walked into the church, her ordinarily immaculate appearance careless and bedraggled. Her blond hair that was usually braided and clipped hung in a messy ponytail, and she was wearing ...