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Name: Brynnet Harlow Age: 23 Gender: female For/Against: For (though secretly) Rank: Brynnet (Brynn for short) is married to a wealthy palace guard named Jonah Harlow. She has no job, ...

Our domestic civil war tears at us, with gnashing teeth and unretracting claws. Call me an attention whore, but I like to be heard, seen, not ignored, just flawed. Dad ...

Thanks for the reviews. I'll work on it. :)

I want to be among the brazen, like the war heroes, brandishing hearts of the deepest purple hue and scars to remind them of how they grew. I want to ...

I read the original of this and wondered about the ending, too. This is good. Keep it up! :)

Like a clown with made-up face, running like it's a tough race, from the thoughts I know haunt me, joking, smile plastered happy. They keep me around just to laugh, ...

This is really good. I like the name. It kind of draws you in. You know it's going to be depressing, but you read it the way you stare at ...

Really good :)

I love this! I like the way you stated everything that happened so matter-of-factly and made the professor such a lovable dumbass. The ending was pretty unexpected, since he always ...

Ok, this is good, but I have some suggestions if you maybe want to build on it. First, I liked how you start with the nicknames. It was a good ...

I am no damn puppet, not a marionette, to be pulled by the strings of the creepy guy, the puppetmaster. He cannot tell me what clothes to wear, what things ...

This is good! Not only is it organized and well-written, but it's also about a topic that actually matters. It doesn't sound pretentious like a lot of 9-11 things do. ...

This is pretty good. There are a few basic errors in grammar, with some mispelled words and run-on sentences. You can probably catch them if you read it over again. ...

This is good. I like the way you captured a lot of feeling, while still using a basic rhyme scheme. You might want to check your spelling; I found a ...

This is an emotional topic, and you summed it up well. I like the way that you included both the heroes and victims who died and those who survived. I ...