originalhobbit

This is something I wrote two years ago. It was a blog, but I decided to experiment and see if it would work as a poem: I can't believe I ...

I thought this was really funny. I don't agree at all with the people who said it was bad.

I really like this poem. The rhyming is fantastic and it doesn't feel forced at all. I also like the overall flow. Anyway, this is a really good poem, and ...

This reminds of poems I used to write about several "friends" of mine. I can really identify with the anger presented in this.

I wrote this because I felt like finally getting my feelings out about certain events. Feel free to criticize as much as you like. This was just free-writing: She taught ...

This is pretty adorable, especially the last line. My favorite line is the second, when you're saying it's not the end. It's Great for being written by a seven year ...

It's really interesting and I like it. Very interesting choice of words with ambrosia and anemone.

I liked it a little, but it seemed to run on for days. The amount of commas in this poem makes it seem much, much longer than it is, and ...

I really like this. I like how the narrator brings up the chemo casually, like her disease isn't what defines her, but just something she lives with. If that's what ...

Red stains on the carpet, contrasting brilliant white, the hands that left them, soaked with red, are begging to be cleaned. A razor, in the bathroom, shining with artificial light, ...

Is it 3:00 already? When did the clock start to betray me? I never seem to see those hands move. Why is nothing ever really okay? Things never turn out ...

I really like this poem, it has a really unique style to it that I haven't seen much. It's really interesting, and reads more like a story than a poem, ...

All of your precautions, you're careful protection, never fail you, if you can help it. Intentions so pure, seduced by safety's allure, there's no obstacle beyond your confrontation. there's no ...

I agree the the posts above, the poem should be a little more descriptive. Less sentence fragments in the poem would be nice, in my opinion. Overall, it's pretty good, ...

You ripped away my innocence, not a shred was left in sight. You told me everything would be just fine, shattered all my illusions with your lies, and told me ...