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oregongirl

  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Prelude to Suite 1

    I liked this poem a lot! good job on description! :D ML, oregongirl

    Jun 3, 2007
  • Art & Photography Re: My Photography

    These are beautiful!! :D I loved them all! I love how you captured the flowers they're beautiful great job! :) ML, oregongirl

    Jun 3, 2007
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Hurt

    I really liked this poem! :D I loved how it flowed and how you described the emotions it was great! good job! :D

    Jun 3, 2007
  • Art & Photography Re: Winnie The Pooh

    I love it! :D It is adorable! :) good job! ML, oregongirl

    Jun 3, 2007
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Two poems

    I think that you used TOO much rhyming in this poem. Try to work on that and it will be a lot better.

    May 27, 2007
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Friendship

    You really killed the poem by saying "friendship" so many times. Also I think you should work on punctuation. You put periods after every line except the last one in ...

    May 27, 2007
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: The wind of sorrow

    I think you definitely over used the title. I think it was pretty good. good job! :D

    May 27, 2007
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: The Warm Glass Window

    I think you should add more caps I agree with kitty15. and also add a little more punctuation. good job :D

    May 27, 2007
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Eternity of rest

    I liked this poem a lot! I think you did a really good job! :) Great job!

    May 27, 2007
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Rondelet - Through Jealous Eyes

    I think you should maybe add more. :) I didn't really get what you were trying to say. I also think maybe you shouldn't use "tinted glass" a lot. Except ...

    May 27, 2007
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Perfection

    I really liked this poem! :) The word "perfect" did bother me after awhile I agree with afterthought. but I didn't think that it was too plain at all! Great ...

    May 27, 2007
  • Other Poetry Re: Of Pigments And Protons

    Good description in this poem! I really liked this! Good job and keep it up!

    May 23, 2007
  • Other Poetry Re: Her suicide note

    ok well hello :) um there were a few mistakes in here. Um in the second paragraph the second line the 'i' should be captilized and some of the beginning ...

    May 23, 2007
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Among the Vine

    Hello Shawn! :) Welcome to YWS! It says that you are a new member so welcome! ok well I also want to make sure that you know that you should ...

    May 23, 2007
  • Lyric Poetry Re: To Xanthan Gum

    Wow cool poem! :) I really liked this one a lot! I agree with muffin! (EnchantressMuffin) it didn't make sense in some parts but even if it wasn't supposed to ...

    May 23, 2007


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