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Re: Prelude to Suite 1
I liked this poem a lot! good job on description! :D ML, oregongirl
Jun 3, 2007 -
Re: My Photography
These are beautiful!! :D I loved them all! I love how you captured the flowers they're beautiful great job! :) ML, oregongirl
Jun 3, 2007 -
Re: Hurt
I really liked this poem! :D I loved how it flowed and how you described the emotions it was great! good job! :D
Jun 3, 2007 -
Re: Winnie The Pooh
I love it! :D It is adorable! :) good job! ML, oregongirl
Jun 3, 2007 -
Re: Two poems
I think that you used TOO much rhyming in this poem. Try to work on that and it will be a lot better.
May 27, 2007 -
Re: Friendship
You really killed the poem by saying "friendship" so many times. Also I think you should work on punctuation. You put periods after every line except the last one in ...
May 27, 2007 -
Re: The wind of sorrow
I think you definitely over used the title. I think it was pretty good. good job! :D
May 27, 2007 -
Re: The Warm Glass Window
I think you should add more caps I agree with kitty15. and also add a little more punctuation. good job :D
May 27, 2007 -
Re: Eternity of rest
I liked this poem a lot! I think you did a really good job! :) Great job!
May 27, 2007 -
Re: Rondelet - Through Jealous Eyes
I think you should maybe add more. :) I didn't really get what you were trying to say. I also think maybe you shouldn't use "tinted glass" a lot. Except ...
May 27, 2007 -
Re: Perfection
I really liked this poem! :) The word "perfect" did bother me after awhile I agree with afterthought. but I didn't think that it was too plain at all! Great ...
May 27, 2007 -
Re: Of Pigments And Protons
Good description in this poem! I really liked this! Good job and keep it up!
May 23, 2007 -
Re: Her suicide note
ok well hello :) um there were a few mistakes in here. Um in the second paragraph the second line the 'i' should be captilized and some of the beginning ...
May 23, 2007 -
Re: Among the Vine
Hello Shawn! :) Welcome to YWS! It says that you are a new member so welcome! ok well I also want to make sure that you know that you should ...
May 23, 2007 -
Re: To Xanthan Gum
Wow cool poem! :) I really liked this one a lot! I agree with muffin! (EnchantressMuffin) it didn't make sense in some parts but even if it wasn't supposed to ...
May 23, 2007
