oregongirl

I agree it was a little too quick. Maybe you should have it go a little longer before having it pull you in.

I think that "wnd" was supposed to be wind. Make sure you profread your pieces. I like it very much!

hmm. interesting are you starting a story with it? I like the beginning though.

I liked your poem a lot. You described the things very well! I got what you were trying to say very well