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thanx for all them opinions they helped alot! its god to knw what u guys thot cuz now i can go and improve my work. the storyline is kind of ...

lol it is a typo ..it's meant to be ' in it' , thanx for pointing it out il soon ammend it, i do want to write futher upon this ...

thanx triona good to get some responce, and cheers for mentioning them i's lol xxx

i really enjoyed reading that, its such a good piece ! its the kind of thing dat makes u wnt to read on, and in my opinion dat is an ...