oneeyedunicornhunter

woah...i've heard of puppy love...but never kitten love! :lol:

oo, i haven't read any SW fanfic before. a tad sloppy, but i think everything was covered in previous comments. looking forward to more!

hmm, i seem to recall a particularly nasty post you once gave me, Mr. Incandescence. still waiting for your ten page letter of apology...( deserve it for putting up with ...

ahhh, such a controversial topic to post a story about. i'm glad you didn't come right out and state that the MC was a guy--it made it much more powerful ...

right off the bat i saw a mistake..."Sunday evening in an astrology laboratory deep inside the heart of Oklahoma, a stunning discovery was being made." i believe you meant 'Atronomy'? ...

"To my anger there was someone already sitting in my spot." i would change 'anger' to 'frustration'. other than that, all of your errors appeared to be typos. this was ...

I read the New York Times in my kitchen. I had a piece of jellied toast and a mug of coffee with cream. I crunched, sipped, and read away the ...

i'm not sure you understood what i meant. i wasn't just talking about self-examining and self-editing work, or even 'nitpicking'. i meant, have you ever felt so bad about your ...

i believe my first story was written when i was age 14, and it was a load of [word i'm probably not allowed to say on YWS]. my second story ...

recently i've been thinking more and more that my writing is not up to par; i see mistakes, i find myself thinking people with find it too cliche, it seems ...

hmm. change NOTHING. haha, that's all the advice i have for this poem. and the carpet thing...genius. nice.

well, Griffinkeeper found that error--i thought there were more, but i didn't find any...they vanished, i suppose. looking back at it, it seems like the phone talked to the main ...

will do. but don't expect the rest for at least...i don't know...a month. at least. i have most of what i want to write scribbled down hastily, but i haven't ...

oh yeah thanks for reminding me: the rest is going in Advanced Critiques, once i finish it. i meant to say that when i posted this. thanks for your advice, ...

so this is the Prologue and Chapter 1 of my latest venture into the worlds of fancy, 'Change'. i'm not sure if i'll stick with that name, but for now ...