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Hi there :) I just read this and chapter one of your story. Here is what I'm thinking: First off, I really love the way she begins to fight to ...

Great poem :) I love the simplicity of it, how you just come right out and say how much everyone means to you. Hopefully, if you go back and edit ...

Hi! Great chapter :) Just a couple notes: Eventually he believed her reluctantly, though Dean suspected that he also noticed the small amount of blood that was soaking through Sarah's ...

Hi there! I'd like to say that I think this chapter could really benefit from more details and imagery :). While reading it I start to get this great picture ...

What kind of book is this? I have never heard of it :).

Hi there! A few things first: There were a couple problems with keeping it in the same tense in the beginning. Example: there's going to be a time just for ...

Wow guys :) thank you so much for the feedback! I really appreciate the kind words and also the suggestions on changing some of the wording in the story. I ...

the generator gave me: a cop in fairyland eating pistachios :) I was standing on the corner of Duchess Lane and Pilgrim Avenue munching on a pistachio nut when a ...

I look around this room, and I see myself Tacked to the walls and Spewed on the floor With my remains draped over Plastic hangers given One chance at life. ...

Thank you so much for the warm welcome! I'm working hard on some new pieces that I'd love to post soon and get feedback about. It's great to see that ...

Great story! I think it could use a little more detail about Elijah. Perhaps in the beginning you could include more to show what kind of person he is and ...

First off I want to say I really loved this story. I think that maybe it could have some more fluidity/transition easier by having more details. For example, Jimmy pulls ...

Welcome!! Looking forward to reading some of your work :)

I can't control my words. When I open my mouth, they all rush out wild and reckless. When I try to keep my mouth shut, they squeeze out of the ...

I really enjoyed this! I agree with Ignatius5453. Sometimes the first thoughts that pop into our heads come out to be great. I love the visual of communicating with the ...