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Re: The Look-Out
Hello! This was a very cute story and I could definitely see it becoming a great children's story. The thing is though, as others have mentioned previously, there is no ...
Thu Aug 26, 2010 6:14 am -
Re: Two Sides of a Coin excerpt
Hello! This was a great read, I'm really interested in what happens next ;) I love how well this flows and how it's humorous even though it's about someone getting ...
Thu Aug 26, 2010 5:58 am -
Re: (old.)
This is old....don't review it unless you really want to. Edited version can be found here: :P _____ When I finally came back to reality from my hazy meditating state, ...
Thu Aug 26, 2010 5:06 am -
Re: The Diary of A Survivor Entry 1 (Rated 16+ for V & L)
Hello :) So, after reading this I am very interested in seeing where it will go, you definitely have a great idea for a plot going. I do agree with ...
Thu Aug 26, 2010 4:53 am -
Re: Spoiled (working title)
Hello! This was a great read, I'm very interested in seeing where this will go. ;) Here are some nitpicks: She had killed for this spot. She wasn’t letting it ...
Wed Aug 25, 2010 7:37 pm -
Re: (old..)
This is old....don't review it unless you really want to. Edited version can be found here: :P CHAPTER ONE The air was hot and sticky, I was sitting out on ...
Wed Aug 25, 2010 5:38 am -
Re: Box of Dreams
Hey! Welcome to YWS :) This was interesting but you definitely need to get some punctuation in here....specifically quotation marks. There is a lot of telling in your story as ...
Wed Aug 25, 2010 5:29 am -
Re: Plunge
I kind of missed the bright red "This was written by my 8 year old" just like addicted2theshindigg haha. So...seeing how this isn't your work, I'm not really sure how ...
Wed Aug 25, 2010 5:17 am -
Re: The Forever Summer
This was an excellent read, you utilize a fantastic vocabulary along with sentences that flow very well. The thing that I would have liked to see more in this prologue ...
Wed Aug 04, 2010 7:44 am -
Re: blahhhh
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Fri Sep 18, 2009 5:25 am -
Re: Word Game
( :) me too) um... banana
Tue Dec 30, 2008 3:32 am -
Re: Word Game
wow
Sun Dec 28, 2008 8:21 pm -
Re: Rate the Avatar Above You! [3]
8/10 cute!
Sun Dec 28, 2008 8:20 pm -
Re: Rate the Avatar Above You! [3]
8/10 it's cool :)
Thu Dec 25, 2008 1:01 am -
Re: Potpourri.
These are really cool pics! I especially like the third one. It seems like you had a good Summer :) What is that last one of? It looks really cool ...
Wed Dec 24, 2008 6:55 pm
