onceuponatim3xo

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7/10 it's philosiphical - which is good - but very *cough, cough* emo

It's hard not to laugh at the people who are like "what? huh? what are you talking about?" I laughed so hard when I read that part in the book!

7/10 I like when people put quotes or excerpts

okay here goes.... Two men walked into a bar. One ducked.

8/10 That's a funny website :lol:

8/10 I really like it! is this one better?

Thank you! Yeah, I'll have to change this - definitely! Also, it's not going to be my title, don't worry. I just didn't want to put Untitled down :D About ...

6/10 it kind of freaks me out a little

Okay thank you so much for the help! :D

Thank you soo much for reading it! :D I am going to have to go back and make it less rushed though! I'll probably outline a better beginning before I ...

How can you tell if something is cliched, when you are not trying to have it cliched nor do you think it is? I'm confused :? Please help! - Onceuponatim3xo

Thank you very much for critiquing! My original draft is in my profile if you want to see it. I decided to change the story because I didn't want it ...

Actually, that's not at all what I meant. I didn't really have any metaphors :? Also - my story really doesn't have anything to do with love, there might be ...

This was really good! Just a few things though: She felt nothing, heard nothing, saw nothing, smelt nothing, tasted nothing. I think it would flow better if you said smelled ...