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CHAPTER TWO The downtown of Williamstown, Massachusetts was only a few blocks long. The only places for teens to hang out were Mario’s Pizza Palace, The Burger Joint, the bowling ...

Ahahaha I love how this has almost 60 views but only three critiques because either no one wanted to start the long process of telling me everything that was wrong ...

It was a dark and stormy night; Alex was pacing in his chamber. He frowned. He was thinking of something. Something very frustrating to him. How to defeat the King. ...

Hello! This was really interesting, I'm curious to find out what happens next. There were a few things that you might want to fix... First, was the gender of the ...

Hello! This was pretty bad, but I have a few ways for you to make it even worse ;) Once upon a time, there was a beautiful princess. She had ...

Hello! I really like the song that you put with the video, it fits in well, I also like how at certain points the beat goes along with the text. ...

Even though you think you can't draw, I'm still sitting here in jealousy. I think that it's so cool that you have the ability to draw the characters of your ...

Aw, this was really sweet. I really liked reading it. It was so comparable to real life, even in its fable nature. I agree that the piece would have worked ...

Hello there! I really enjoyed reading this, it was very descriptive and easy to picture. There were a few awkward bits though: As he tugged them on, he heard the ...

Hello! I have to agree with storyweaver; this story has a lot of potential, but you kept each paragraph only about a sentence long. Try setting the scene beforehand, was ...

Yeah! I'll have to check those out, thanks. :)

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So, today, I ordered some books off the Barnes & Noble website because I've never gotten a package and I really wanted to receive one since it seems like it ...

banned for having a creepy old guy for an avatar. ;)

Granted, but you turn into the Black Swan and die. I wish I could teleport.