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Hey there! Well you were right, I wasn't able to find any grammatical errors! Moving on from that...I thought the story itself was good. At this point I am unable ...

Hey there! I'm Mars and I will be your reviewer! First off I noticed a few things in your writing. Noting huge but just little things... He was always there. ...

*Sigh* You simply can not write a bad story can you? I loved the first chapter, even more than the preface. I can't wait to find out how they all ...

Oh yay! Oh yay! Oh yay! *bounces up and down in excitement* In case you could not tell from the line above I thought your rewrite went very well indeed. ...

Hey there! Just call me Mars and I will be your reviewer today! :) Okay, first off I liked your story. I mean I really liked it. It was cute ...

I was indeed action packed just as you promised. For me however it lost some of that great quality you had in your previous two chapters. This chapter, for all ...

Hey Ash! Okay first off, love the title! Alrighty, on to the actual review and such. I didn't notice any big grammar mishaps and if there are...I myself am not ...

Hey Everyone, this is a story I have been working on for a while and you know how those things please feel free to rip this completely apart! :D Sorry ...

I can't wait to see how you get these two together...*smirks at thought* Anywho, I enjoyed it very much just as with your last chapter I thought this one was ...

Hey there! I just read this and thought I'd leave you a little something before I went to go read your other chapter. First off, I really liked where you ...

Oh my... That was a very good read indeed. It was interesting from the first sentence to the last word. I thought the way you crafted it was amazing. Rich ...

Hey Ash! Thanks for the PM! :D Okay, I see that most have the nit-picks have been done for me so I won't worry about those (not that you ever ...

Then, then, then, then, then...you get the picture. At some point in there you used then way too much, try to find another word for then so it doesn't feel ...

Oh my oh my... WHAT A GREAT STORY! :o See, this is why I can not just drop off the planet for a few months because when I do you ...

O_o I liked it. I thought it was very nicely written and you made me care about your characters, something I thought impressive for the fact that this is only ...