olivia1987uk

I agree with ashleylee here... Nice little plot and whatnot but we need to get to know the main character a bit better so we, as readers, can relate... The ...

Smoking in pubs? You having a laugh? They were the good old days! haha

Please!

any chance?

I bit down on my lip and turned over in bed with my mobile pressed firmly to my left ear. Yet again I was smiling ear to ear, as I ...

I really want to know more about your such a small amount of words you hint at so much...i wish it was used as a foreshadowing tool...that means I want ...

Quite keen on this myself...though for some reason, I didn't think i was going to be from the kind of put me off but I couldn't tell you might be ...

Blah blah blah blah blah! See all my previous reviews full of positive adjectives and apply them to this one too! I'm not saying I prefer this to the other ...

Liked the idea of this...it's very different which I appreciate... It's half article and half almost epistolary story...which is a nice but surprising combination...If you had described this to me ...

I quite liked it, though wish there was more....lol...I am somewhat confused though... Is Jame a name or is it a typo? It could well be a name I just ...

I think the first and last sentences are rather stereotypical....try and come back with something a little different.... Think of it like this...you're a sales person trying to sell your ...

Love the happens to us all at some point and it's always horrible...it's great to have a theme loads of people can relate to... Noticed a couple of problems though ...

Lol, the man is autistic...the words are basic for a reason! This is also why it doesn't "flow"!

I'm sure I can stretch to an advanced critique... xxx

Hmmmm are you carrying on with this? Was a bit disappointed with the lack of information given about why Rachel was in trouble...I also was unsure about her friendship with ...