oceanwriter99

3 Joy just stared at her food not feeling hungry or happy after her undermining conversation with Julian earlier that evening. She could tell that people where starting to notice ...

2 As Joy sat in her scolding bathtub letting the heat warm her bones, she thought about what the rest of her day might be like. She was in the ...

She was walking through the snow, she was shivering uncontrollably. All of Joy’s clothes were soaked and she could feel some of them starting to freeze to her body as ...

First off I like the concept idea that you have going on, but it all starts off on a pretty strange note. So to my understanding, your MC was in ...

Hey! First off I really like this, it sounds very interesting! Its just, I think you could of put a little bit more into the start of the story to ...

This is a very interesting piece, I like it but wish you would of put some more explanations and descriptions in it. It is a bit over dramatic if you ...

First off really good! Just a few things, as before. First in the sentence " "She said the guy cit her Brachial artery, the one in your arm. She's losing ...

First off I think this is a really good concept! I love the idea of a girl werewolf! Thats not something you see often and that's something that would keep ...

I think it's a very interesting piece, its just you move through it very quickly. I think its a truly beautiful piece of writing, but toward the end the last ...

First off I think its a good idea. But you need to go back through and revise, revise, revise. One part that I don't seem to understand is the world ...

I love where you are taking this story! Just a few minor things, once again. For one thing, I don't understand why the MC didn't tell Master that she had ...

First off I love the concept and idea of the story,really cool! Just a few things. "Simple people, people no better than she knew Master to be, those were the ...

First off, I think its a good concept but the story it's self is very confusing. You talk about you last adventure and how you were transported some where else, ...

I think this is great! As in the first chapter you sort of moved quickly through the scene with the woods. I would have like to see you MC and ...

Great concept but I think you may just want to be a little more descriptive but I think it will end up at being a great story